Writing Goal

Writing Goals

Next Step:
In order to move a step, I would like to improve on shortening my sentence, I tend to write a lot since I can't explain my point properly without writing it in detail. I also need to proofread my writing since I rushed my essay the last time so I need to make time to edit my writing.

Goal:
My next goal is to at least achieve level 6b.

Migration Letter (Reposted)

Lily Rose

Christchurch, New Zealand

May 17th 1950

           James Rose

London, England

Dear, Mother and Father

Life had been remarkably challenging back in London, it’s started to get overcrowded there hence the lack of job opportunity, I know you guys will acknowledge my dreams and let me pursue to be a well-known tailor, I always had admired tailoring clothes and I wouldn’t be able to reach my dreams with the lack of opportunities there. Children are also being exploited, forcing them to work in dangerous conditions making me worry about my future child’s fate if I stay there. The houses are also poorly made having no running water and toilet inside leading to share bathrooms with strangers, on top of that they’re built so close together, leaving me no privacy, all I could hear all day and night was our neighbour’s gossips. The pollution, it’s starting to get even worse the air is all covered in a thick black fog if I didn’t leave my lungs would be filled with that disgusting thing by now. The pollution and lack of running water in the houses isn’t helping with the diseases either, I can’t risk my health anymore almost everyone in our neighbourhood has caught a disease at least one at a household gets Typhus, Typhoid, and Cholera from drinking dirty water that contains faeces due to the poor water filter system. Please be careful of the disease going around, only if you guys agreed upon my request of migrating to another country I wouldn’t have left you there (I’m deeply sorry for being selfish).

As you know one month prior to my migration, I was seeking for a job, I travelled all over the city looking for companies that would hire a tailor, this was when I found a poster promoting a new life in another country, it felt like it was calling my name and is the only way out of this hell, the picture was very enticing, so I decided to pursue it.

Before boarding the ship, I had mix feelings, I contemplated whether or not to stay, to leave everything behind there including my family and friends but  I’m glad to say that I made the right decisions living here but sadly I couldn’t say the same about the trip. The steerage had a wood interior, it wasn’t as big as I thought especially for the number of people boarding, the majority of the spaces was taken up by rows of bunk bed that stack up to three, enough to fit a slender person, in the middle are long tables for passengers to lounge in. The ship was filled with families, many children ran around despite the tight space, the sound of the babies crying still echoes in my ear reminding me about my family leaving me to feel very lonely, I couldn’t help but tear up. Halfway through the trip, it felt like I was losing my mind, I even had thoughts of jumping out of the ship, sick of smelling body odour that surrounds  the atmosphere, and looking at the same layout, faces and eating the same plain, dried, tasteless food they serve every day, during that time, mum, I missed your cooking, I wanted to go home and run up to your arms. The only thing that kept me sane was the books that I brought and the sea life we pass through admiring the beautiful creation making me forget about the never-ending trip, they also hold concerts inside the ship to entertain passengers but it still couldn’t help me erase the memories of witnessing the number of deaths on board. The diseases were caused by the lack of hygiene, we had limited fresh water supplies that weren’t able to clean everyone and had a restriction of being able to drink 3.4 litres of water a day.

All of the sufferings came to a halt when I arrived in paradise. Getting off the ship a smell of fresh air entered my nose, the cold breeze made my skin shivered but the sun made it warm again. At first, I was lost, I didn’t know where to go but I found it very exciting, I admit that I enjoyed being independent building my own legacy and starting a new life from scratch. After migrating here I met a lot of new friends, they toured me around the country, they took me to  all the beautiful places here, driving around, I haven’t seen anything bad about this place, it was perfect, not a single pollution was in the air, the ground was still covered in greenery and hills were still filled with trees and bushes, the mountain's peak wasn’t visible due to the long white cloud covering it, and the rivers were still clear as glass. Being beautiful and clean wasn’t the only advantage this place had, it also has a lot of new opportunities not just for me but my future children, unlike London where people struggled looking for a job, companies here are actually the one seeking for people. Did I mention that I got a job as I tailor? It has a good paycheck, more than enough to feed myself. I also meet new customers every day that compliments my work recommending me to their friends, that encourages me to stay inspired to what I do and continue pursuing my dreams of being a famous tailor. Despite feeling like I was living a lavish life, I still felt like something was missing, I miss you guys, maybe after reading this it will somehow convince you to migrate here with me and hopefully, this would lessen your anger towards me. I had saved up enough to buy a house that could fit the whole family in, settling here isn’t hard and many opportunities await...

Your Daughter,

Lily Rose

Migration Letter

Lily Rose

Christchurch, New Zealand

May 17th 1950

           James Rose

London, England

Dear, Mother and Father

Life had been remarkably challenging back in London, it’s started to get overcrowded there hence the lack of job opportunity, I know you guys will acknowledge my dreams and let me pursue to be a well-known tailor, I always had admired tailoring clothes and I wouldn’t be able to reach my dreams with the lack of opportunities there. Children are also being exploited, forcing them to work in dangerous conditions making me worry about my future child’s fate if I stay there. The houses are also poorly made having no running water and toilet inside leading to share bathrooms with strangers, on top of that they’re built so close together, leaving me no privacy, all I could hear all day and night was our neighbour’s gossips. The pollution, it’s starting to get even worse the air is all covered in a thick black fog if I didn’t leave my lungs would be filled with that disgusting thing by now. The pollution and lack of running water in the houses isn’t helping with the diseases either, I can’t risk my health anymore almost everyone in our neighbourhood has caught a disease at least one at a household gets Typhus, Typhoid, and Cholera from drinking dirty water that contains faeces due to the poor water filter system. Please be careful of the disease going around, only if you guys agreed upon my request of migrating to another country I wouldn’t have left you there (I’m deeply sorry for being selfish).

As you know one month prior to my migration, I was seeking for a job, I travelled all over the city looking for companies that would hire a tailor, this was when I found a poster promoting a new life in another country, it felt like it was calling my name and is the only way out of this hell, the picture was very enticing, so I decided to pursue it.

Before boarding the ship, I had mix feelings, I contemplated whether or not to stay, to leave everything behind there including my family and friends but  I’m glad to say that I made the right decisions living here but sadly I couldn’t say the same about the trip. The steerage had a wood interior, it wasn’t as big as I thought especially for the number of people boarding, the majority of the spaces was taken up by rows of bunk bed that stack up to three, enough to fit a slender person, in the middle are long tables for passengers to lounge in. The ship was filled with families, many children ran around despite the tight space, the sound of the babies crying still echoes in my ear reminding me about my family leaving me to feel very lonely, I couldn’t help but tear up. Halfway through the trip, it felt like I was losing my mind, I even had thoughts of jumping out of the ship, sick of smelling body odour that surrounds  the atmosphere, and looking at the same layout, faces and eating the same plain, dried, tasteless food they serve every day, during that time, mum, I missed your cooking, I wanted to go home and run up to your arms. The only thing that kept me sane was the books that I brought and the sea life we pass through admiring the beautiful creation making me forget about the never-ending trip, they also hold concerts inside the ship to entertain passengers but it still couldn’t help me erase the memories of witnessing the number of deaths on board. The diseases were caused by the lack of hygiene, we had limited fresh water supplies that weren’t able to clean everyone and had a restriction of being able to drink 3.4 litres of water a day.

All of the sufferings came to a halt when I arrived in paradise. Getting off the ship a smell of fresh air entered my nose, the cold breeze made my skin shivered but the sun made it warm again. At first, I was lost, I didn’t know where to go but I found it very exciting, I admit that I enjoyed being independent building my own legacy and starting a new life from scratch. After migrating here I met a lot of new friends, they toured me around the country, they took me to  all the beautiful places here, driving around, I haven’t seen anything bad about this place, it was perfect, not a single pollution was in the air, the ground was still covered in greenery and hills were still filled with trees and bushes, the mountain's peak wasn’t visible due to the long white cloud covering it, and the rivers were still clear as glass. Being beautiful and clean wasn’t the only advantage this place had, it also has a lot of new opportunities not just for me but my future children, unlike London where people struggled looking for a job, companies here are actually the one seeking for people. Did I mention that I got a job as I tailor? It has a good paycheck, more than enough to feed myself. I also meet new customers every day that compliments my work recommending me to their friends, that encourages me to stay inspired to what I do and continue pursuing my dreams of being a famous tailor. Despite feeling like I was living a lavish life, I still felt like something was missing, I miss you guys, maybe after reading this it will somehow convince you to migrate here with me and hopefully, this would lessen your anger towards me. I had saved up enough to buy a house that could fit the whole family in, settling here isn’t hard and many opportunities await...

Your Daughter,

Lily Rose

Writing Practice

Wednesday, April 15th 2019


5. The Adverb Start

1. Significantly, a boy shouted in the middle of a quiet library.
2. Firstly, your shoes should be removed and placed outside the door.

6. Begin With A Preposition

1. On 2011, was when a huge earthquake struck Christchurch.
2. Between the wall, was a huge painting.

8. The -Ed Start

Try starting a sentence with the -ed form of the verb. It makes for a punchy opening to the sentence.

Examples:

Committed, Undaunted, Determined, Forced, Gifted, Blighted, Thrilled, Delighted, Blessed, Overpowered, Foreshadowed.

1. Overpowered by the bullies, the boy ran as fast as he can.
2. Committed to his work, the student worked diligently.

11. The W-Start Sentence

Try beginning a sentence with a W-word. The W-start makes the writing sound thoughtful and knowledgeable.

Examples: Who, While, When, Where, What, Whereas.

1. While everyone was distracted, I continued to remain focus .
2. When I was running around the field, I tripped over a rock.

School uniforms are a waste of time and money.

It's a common misconception that school uniforms are waste of money and time however it is the complete opposite, it benefits the students in many ways, lowering the risk of them being late. Interestingly it actually saves students time in the morning and saves money for doing less laundry. Study shows that teenagers perceive clothes as something that express themselves this makes them overthink of what they're going to wear being afraid to be judged, this is when school uniforms save time, instead of worrying about what to wear mix-matching outfits, student are already given an outfit that also teaches them to dress formally and be tardy. On top of that, wearing different clothes every day causes more time and money in the long run. Though some people might argue that school uniforms are pointless it actually was put there for a reason, to help them to save time to teaching student to be tardy, shaping them to be decent people.


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Thursday, May 16th 2019

5. The Adverb Start
Sadly the team lost by one point.
Remarkably, this was where the president was born.


6. Begin With A Preposition
Throughout the history of the school, they were the first one to win an award.
Behind her, was her friend getting ready to scare her.


8. The -Ed Start
Delighted by the gift, she thanked her parents.
Encouraged by his teacher, he went up to the stage anxiously.

11. The W-Start Sentence
With a purse on her arm, she strutted on the runway.

7. The-Ing Start
Try starting a sentence with the -ing form of a verb. The rule: when you have finished your -ing phrase, place comma, then write the rest of the sentence.

Examples:
Deciding, Speaking, Seeing, Grasping, Rising, Looking, Holding, Emerging, Taking, Signalling, Analysing,

Anticipating the results to be announced, she remained silent.
Analysing the text, his head started to ache.

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Friday, May 17th 2019

5. The Adverb Start
Anxiously, she walked over a narrow bridge.


6. Begin With A Preposition
Far from what she expected, she felt relieved.


8. The -Ed Start
Entertained by the performers, he clapped his hand.

11. The W-Start Sentence
Whereas the adults chatted, the children played together.

7. The-Ing Start
Starting from now, the class had to be quiet.

English-Rewriting Hare And The Tortoise.

The Hare And The Tortoise

Retold by Sofia

Once upon a time there lived a hare, he was the fastest animal in town, he’s faster than anyone or anything! While taking a morning hop he stumbled across a slow tortoise. The hare saw that the tortoise was walking with a beautiful young hare, she had big beautiful brown eyes and the fluffiest ears, he knew he had to get her and beating the tortoise on a race is the only way.

The hare approached the slow-paced tortoise, “hey you slow tortoise!” said the hare frantically jumping up and down, the tortoise slowly turned his head towards the hare, “how….can... I help…. you?”  the tortoise replied slowly, “I challenge you to race me in exchange for the beautiful hare next to you” the hare said with a smirk, winking at the lade hare surely knowing that he would win the race, “de..al!” the tortoise said confidently, the hare looked surprised with the reply he got from the tortoise, “ok then, let's have a race tomorrow morning in the park” he replied while running down the path.

It was the next morning, both the competitors were both lined up on the red line, there was a huge crowd watching the race cheering for both of the competitors, the tortoise looked calm and the hare looked fearless. The gun was shot, indicating for them to run, both of them started, the hare swifted across the track looking back at the tortoise grinning, looking back at the sluggish tortoise. On the other hand, the tortoise had a slow start, but he’s not giving up, he is still very determined not caring even if the hare’s lead was huge.

The hare was zooming through the path, skipping and hopping with a big grin on his face, almost reaching the end of the race when he stumbled upon a big patch of grass with fruits and vegetables surrounding it. The hare decided to take a rest not worrying about the tortoise catching up. He stuffed his mouth with grass, fruits and vegetables until he had a food coma, that he couldn’t even move anymore, his eyes started to close on their own but the hare tried to resist until he eventually gave in.

It’s already at the peak of the afternoon when the tortoise’s heavy breathing woke the hare up, the hare’s slumber was disturbed, but it was disturbed for the better if it weren’t for the tortoise’s heavy breathing the hare wouldn’t be able to wake up to finish the race before the tortoise. The hare got up very slowly even slower than the tortoise’s walk and tried to jump but his stomach was too full of food that he couldn’t carry himself. The tortoise was slowly but surely making his way through the finish line whilst the hare is still struggling to lift himself up. The hare was left gobsmacked when he heard the crowd cheering and chanting “tortoise! tortoise!”, the roles have been switched, the hare finally understood what it’s like being slow and learned his lesson to not underestimate anyone.

THE END

Writing Goals

My Goal:

My goal in writing is to expand more of my vocabulary words to make my stories more interesting, I want to achieve R6 on Vocabulary.

I have chosen this because I think it's really important to use good words for my writing.

To achieve this goal I will need to read more books and if I come across to a word I don't know I would search up the meaning and try to apply it in my writing.

Orana Wildlife Park

Hornby High School
180 Waterloo Road,
Hornby,
Christchurch 8042

Monday 7th August 2017

Sarah
793 Mcleans Island Road,
Mcleans Island,
Christchurch 8051

Dear Sarah
I would like to thank you for letting us have an amazing experience at Orana Park. I had lots of fun encountering different animals that I haven't even heard of and learning new facts about it. Something I learnt was the ''HIPPO'' which stands for: H- Habbitat lost I- Introduced species P- Pollution P- Population overgrowth  O- Over use. My favourite part was enetering through the The Great Apes, I love seeing the home of the monkeys and looking at  their hand and footprint.



What we did today.
When the bell rung we all went inside our classroom that's when our teachers gave us our designated numbers for our groups, we had a chance of leaving our school equipment in the classroom so we wont get tired strolling around the zoo carrying our heavy bags. Then we all gathered up outside of school patiently waiting for the bus while Ms. Gibson lectures us about the rules and expectation. Finaly the bus arrives, we were divided by our form class, it took about 15 minutes to get there from our school.

After arriving at our destination, we were again split up by our number groups. 2 groups split apart and entered to different gates. This where the adventure begins, we were taken to the zoo school where we entered a circus like room, we had a staff from orana park talk to us for 5 minutes. We had a short morning tea then we went straight to the kiwi area. The kiwi area was dark, Ican hardly see a thing, but I managed to spot a kiwi in the corner. We proceeded looking at different animals in the zoo and learning new facts about them.

I had lot's of fun going on this trip,learning that there's lots of endangered animals, and knowing we should take care of them. We need animals in this world and there's already a lot that's extinc, we should take care of the endangered ones.

Persuasion Writing

The Art Of Persuasion

• Offer something 

-support or favours
-information or facts

• Get them interested
• Reasonable believable

Tips for advertising.

• decide who you trying to persuade
•  be clear about you aim
• choose you words carefully
• use you imagination

Can Opener

CAN OPENER

After waking up from a deep sleep you feel famished, so you decided to prepare yourself a toast with can baked beans. Having the can in front of you, you realised that you require an object to open it with, so you rummage through your drawers to look for a can opener. While trying to open the can you wonder…. How does a can opener work?

What is a can opener?

A can opener is a tool that helps us open cans more efficiently. It consists of three simple machines: a wheel and axle, lever, and a wedge. The two metal arms that are pressed onto the can are levers. The handle that is use to rotate is a wheel and axle. Lastly the wheel that cuts the can open is the wedge. It is a way that is easier and not having to use other resources like knives that would slip if it didn’t get handled carefully. I believe that can openers are important and can help our lives more than we expect.

How does a can opener work?

When using a can opener the first thing to do is apply the arms to the can by tightly compressing it together, that causes the serrated wheels grip into the can. Then start turning the handles, turning the handle(which acts as an axle) causes the serrated wheel to rotate and move the cutter blade across the top of the can that cuts it. A lot of force is needed to keep the cutter down. The cutting blade needs to be stronger than the lid of the can in order for it to work.

How does it cut?

Pretend squishing a butter into your hand. The butter has to move out of the way so it goes out sideways while it gets flattened. However when using a thinner material to cut like the blade on a can opener,the edge is thinner so the pressure(Having the right amount of force to move something)is higher and easier to push through.

How does this simple machine make life easier?

Without having a can opener in everyday life, it makes our lives more difficult by trying to open cans with different resources that can be dangerous like knives, scissors, and other sharp objects.

Now you know how a can opener works,It is fascinating to know how a machine works and realised how complex it is. In summary a can opener works by applying a lot grip on a handle that turns the blade. Also the blade cuts by the pressure.

My Memoir

First day at Hornby High School

Driving through the school gates my feelings transitioned from excited to anxious real quickly. I opened the white car door nervously, wobbily strolling to my class. I started to feel left out because I didn’t have a school uniform yet and almost everyone know each other because most of them are from the same school.  We went inside the classroom and my dad chatted with my new teacher, I observed my new classroom, it looked very vibrant and modern.

When I heard the echo of the bell, the butterflies in my stomach spread all over my body, for a second there I almost panicked, I was telling my dad that I wanted to go home trying to hold back the tears that was about to fall. I rushed straight to the car trying to avoid people staring at me, I heard my dad’s footstep getting stronger. I tried covering my face hoping I could rewind the day and saved myself from getting embarrassed.